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10/10/13 2:29 P

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I love to write poetry, but am currently experiencing writer's block. Hoping joining teams & sharing poetry will give me the inspiration I need.

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5/4/12 3:50 P

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I think the poem gives us a whole new perspective on what it is like to be a twin. I knew a set of identical twins. One had a mole and the other didn't . The one with the mole was nicer to me, so even without the mole I could tell the different. I am fascinated by all of this.

I believe a poem should be true to how you feel (at least how you felt at the time you wrote it). Thank you for sharing your poem.

Since you are the oldest you have to set the example. emoticon Really, being older is something that uniquely sets you apart.

Keep a writing,
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5/4/12 1:45 P

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I am older! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I was kind of disappointed that someone I sent it to thought it was depressing and somewhat disparaging, which I never intended at all. They told me to throw it out.

Living a life a little less ordinary!

"Strong is the enemy with
outposts in your head!"


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5/4/12 12:18 P

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Very nicely done. I enjoyed it thoroughly. :) Would you mind if someone asks who is oldest?



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5/3/12 10:18 P

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Cause I'm A Twin


It happened a long, long time ago;
I don't remember, I just know.
Out into the bright lights of the world I came
And then another who looked just the same.
Cause I'm a twin.

I never knew at the time how it would be
To have someone else look just like me.
With folks gathering around to scrutinize
From which was taller, or had the bluest eyes.
Cause I'm a twin.

Life went on like that for many years
Sometimes it brought laughter, sometimes tears.
Dressed alike, right down to black patent shoes!
No matter what or where, it was always twos.
Cause I'm a twin

Then as I grew, it really got old
It must be really fun, I was often told;
But deep inside, the feelings grew
I just wanted to be me, and let you be you!
Cause I'm a twin

When someone came up and said "You two look alike!"
I wanted to say, "Just take a hike!"
Why can't they understand, how nice it would be
If you were just you and I was just me?
Cause I'm a twin.

At last in my 60's I can honestly say
I'm the only one in this town who looks like me.
Cause she moved to the big city and now I'm free
I may still look like her, but folks know its' me.!.

And when I die, whenever it be
They'll be sure its' really me.
As they gather around the casket, all the next of kin
I won't even have to hear them say," Ya know she's a twin!"



Edited by: GOBBLER11 at: 5/3/2012 (22:21)
Living a life a little less ordinary!

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