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I'm being such a slacker and watching Bones on NetFlix instead of writing... and now that Gilmore Girls is coming... oy.



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Well I got half way through a pivotal scene today. Feeling good here about that!

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I had that issue some times with my netbook. Maybe cause it's small and my hand strays across the mousepad when typing on it. But I rarely write on it as I mostly use it to play music while I type on my Mac.


Today I worked on a short story. I need to get editing though.

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I don't have that problem on my laptop. Mine is just overall slow. It's an old Windows XP. We have a nice slick Windows 7 one, but that's our racing laptop so I can't use that one. emoticon

I have chapter 9 done and sent to one of my beta readers. She suggested a few places where I might need some additional info in the chapter. I looked it over and ended up adding two sentences to it.

I'm 500 words or so into Chapter 10.

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Writing for 15 minutes every morning, 500-700 WPD.
I could probably write more WPD, if my cursor would stop drifting away from the line I'm typing.
This happen to anyone else using a laptop/notebook? Any fixes?


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9/12/14 11:45 A

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Still working on my WIP every day.

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9/10/14 3:39 P

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I have about 2/3 of chapter 9 done so far. :)

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Worked on editing a short story so that I can send it out soon.

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9/9/14 10:40 A

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Hooray for still writing! And who-hoo to the kissing scene. ;)

and I find that when I help critique someone else, it improves my writing as well.



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A bit. But I'll do the bulk of it tonight after hubby goes to bed. I did try to do some each day this past weekend. I'm also acting as a beta reader for my friend. We have really different writing styles.

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9/5/14 2:38 P

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No! And it's been more than a week now. I get distracted with all these things happening around me. Have to make myself go to the office and not work from the kitchen table! Next week that 's the goal.

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I'm skipping my workout today at lunch (I just don't have any energy today!), so I'll do some writing instead. I just hope I'm not coming down with something!

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9/4/14 7:28 P

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emoticon I had a better flow today, I have 2723 words done in Chapter 8, kissing scene is under my belt, and some conflict between two other charters that could prove interesting.

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Well...the chapter seems to be flowing better. I did about 400-500 words. Got the first major kissing scene done. emoticon

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9/3/14 11:46 A

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Yeah...I'm not stopping. I'll move on and just get the words down and revisit it later. I do know that if I stop now I may not get back to it. It's kind of like that with working out!

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9/3/14 11:44 A

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I'm still working on 8. I've decide to take all of your advice and I'll just lay it all out there for the chapter then revisit when I'm done. The long Holiday messed up my writing time at home. Hard to find time to write with hubby home at the same time. emoticon

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9/3/14 10:49 A

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I don't really know. I do now that what I have done in chapter 8 so feels a bit forced. I'm not totally happy with it right now. Is it normal to feel that way at some point?

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This is the point that separates "I want to be a writer" from "I AM a writer."

It's normal to feel that way. It's even more normal to stop writing and figure you'll come back to it when the time is right.

Most people never come back.

Don't obsess over getting it perfect your first time through. So, that chapter wasn't great. Move on, and I bet that around chapter 16 or so, you'll realize what you did wrong back in chapter 8. Make a note, and then go back and fix it. But don't get hung up here. Everyone hits a bad patch. They key is not to let it stop you.

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Yes. Every day. :)

Are you moving on or going to try to figure it out? I usually move on and attack it with the first round of edits. If I can fix it, great. If it still feels wrong, I cut it. It hurts, but if it's not working, it will only damage your story.





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I don't really know. I do now that what I have done in chapter 8 so feels a bit forced. I'm not totally happy with it right now. Is it normal to feel that way at some point?

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Myrea, I hear ya. I had decided that my story was going under my bed if the last submission didn't work out. Fortunately it did, but I get the frustration.

Aangel, what's making it hard?
Usually when I'm struggling, it's because I don't have enough conflict in the scene.



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Chapter 8 is at 592 words. This chapter is proving a bit harder to get done.

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That was the plan. I had it out on query and the full thing at a couple of open calls, but I've been getting nothing but form rejections for over a year, and I've just about decided that even if only my friends and family buy it, I want it out there.

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Okay, that cracked me up. FIX. Hee hee hee I get you.

And waiting for what? Were you planning on doing the agent/publishing house route?

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"Oy, good luck. Sometimes that takes longer than the markups. "
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Oh, guaranteed, since a lot of my markups just flag whole paragraphs and say "fix."

Not a small project. But when I'm done, I may well self-publish it and start on book 2. I'm tired of waiting.

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So I have chapter 8 started. Just 327 words so far. But my day job is so interfering with my writing! emoticon

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Good Luck! emoticon

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Oy, good luck. Sometimes that takes longer than the markups.



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Markups DONE.

Now, it's time to start with actually incorporating all those changes into the final product. Wish me luck!

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Nice!!! emoticon

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I've added another 1,308 word to the WIP, and that means it'll be ready for release in late Autumn 2014! So excited to finally birth this baby!

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OK..chapter 7 is DONE! All 3,411 words of it! On to chapter 8!

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Nice!! I'm not seven close to being able to do any kind of mark ups. I'm just about done with chapter 7 one or two more paragraphs I think. I'm like a beta reader for my BFF so I read she's last night.

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Still trudging through markups on my first manuscript. (Taking my red pen to the printed manuscript and checking every word to see if it's the best I could do.)

I'm at about page 250/315. After the mark-ups are done, it's time to get back on the computer and fix it.

So far, I've had 2 clean pages. Considering that I'm basically forcing myself to find something to fix on every page, the fact that there are even two I consider perfect is pretty awesome.

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Your cruising right along.

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Chapter 7 is at 3,090 words.

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Boy I was happy about it too!

I'm now about half way though chapter 7.

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emoticon So glad you recovered all that work. I am going to have to look up digital scrapbooking-- that sounds interesting

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AMEN Krys!!

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YIKES. To any writer that is a disaster. I can't remember the idea I got in the middle of the night without writing it down. Never mind trying to remember the edits on six chapters. Praise goes out to the techies for their very supportive backup systems!

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Abby I use the program Scrivener to write with. I can run it from a flash drive so I carry my writing with me anywhere I go. Monday I skipped my noon workout (had a bit of a headache...sinus thing) so decide to work on my chapter 6. I worked for an hr, then saved it (on the Flash drive). I used flash drives in my work (to load slot games onto my slot machines, I test new games). Well..when I burned my games iso file to one of my work flash drives, it burned it onto my book flash drive. The program that does the burning first formats the drive. I realized what it was doing as it wi9ped everything from my book flash drive.

I was SO sick about it (stupid mistake on my part I know). I had an older version of the first five chapters backed up, those were missing some changes I'd made as the story went along. And all my work on 6 (about 2000 words) was just gone. I stayed up late Monday trying to piece together what I had left when I discovered that the writing software makes auto backups to the C drive on any PC with Scrivener installed on it and that the flash had been plugged into. So I was able to get everything back. Chapters, notes, Character profiles, everything. I was one HAPPY camper!

Lesson learned? I know back up to my personal cloud drive, Dropbox, and a special folder on my Graphics drive at home (I also dabble in making Digital Scrapbooking kits, so I have a one HD just for that stuff).

To me it was a disaster. emoticon

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What near disaster?

Krys, it's hard to know when to stop, isn't it?



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After my near disaster yesterday, I'm back to writing! I finished chapter 6 tonight (3,138 words). It surprised at the end of it. It took a kind of dark turn. So I'm thinking it's time for the hunky love interest to reappear. emoticon

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During editing I always come up with new ideas. Which lead me to tweaking the story, changing this or that, adding here or there, and frequently leading me to believe the story will never get finished.

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Myrea, I remember the first time I did that. EVERY page had some sort of markup. Some of it was a rewrite of the entire page, some of it was a changed word here and there.

The next time I did it, I was maybe 50/50 with markups vs. clean pages. yay!



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I'm trying to print and read mine about every 4-5 chapters, as I go. At least trying to catch the glaring things I'v missed.

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After doing some more in-depth critiquing on novels and short stories for others, I've come to understand a lot of the mistakes I made in my first book. I still think it's worth saving. I have ideas for at leat 3 more books for this character, and I know I can do better.

I started this weekend going page-by-page through the printed manuscript marking it up for revisions. I need to improve the villian's part, and make his plot more believable, which will make his final betrayal that much more painful. I need to torture my MC a little more. Things are too easy on her right up to the end. Oh, and I need to work on my character and setting descrptions. Really, it needs a complete overhaul. So far, I'm on page 84 of 315, and I haven't had a single page that was clean.

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Wow, that editing software isn't very good! *laugh* I think your original paragraph is much better.



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I only have the two friends reading it. And they both don't read romances of any kind. My thoughts were that if I can hook two people that don't normally read this genre, it would be a plus. I wouldn't know how to even find a critique group (or an agent for that matter).

She also keeps saying she's reading it for content because it needs a lot of editing. And I know that's true but wasn't sure what she meant by editing. So today I went looking for info and found this web site called Pro Writing. It's an online editing that you can use for free. I ran the first paragraph of Chapter 1 though it and now I have a better idea of what I think she was talking about. This was my results:

Paragraph 1 from chapter 1:
The room of the small medical center was dark, the shadows reaching out to the small, fragile woman on the large ornate bed, trying to overpower the few lights in the room. The woman's long silver white hair loosely braided, sweat pouring from her small body as she labored to bring a new life into the darkness that was her world. The midwife and her helpers scurried around her, preparing for the impending birth, looking fearfully toward the closed door of the room. To the laboring woman on the bed, this was a familiar scene. Since becoming the wife of William, a man she thought was a white Mage, she had given birth four times, each time bring a healthy, beautiful daughter into the world. And each time that child had be taken from her, never to be seen again, for the William wanted a son. And only a son. He needed a son to fulfill his destiny of being the ruler of both the Human world and the Otherworld.

Now the same paragraph after using this online tool for editing (I know..I'm no where near to needing to edit yet, so I'm only playing around here). See what you think:

The room of the small medical center was dark. Shadows reaching out to the small, fragile woman on the large ornate bed, trying to overpower the few lights in the room. Her long silver white hair in a loose braid, sweat pouring from her small body as she labored to bring a new life into the darkness of her world. As the midwife and her helpers scurried around her, preparing for the impending birth. Looking in fear toward the closed door of the room as they passed it. To the laboring woman on the bed this was a familiar scene. Since becoming the wife of William, a man she thought a white Mage, she had given birth four times. Each time bring a healthy daughter into the world. Each time the child was taken from her, for the William wanted a son. Just a son. He needed a son to fulfill his destiny of being the ruler of both the human world and Otherworld.

I'm going to play around with it. I just jumped into the deep end of this writing thing. I'm a float but dog paddling for dear life! emoticon


PS crap...I see some fixes even now! emoticon


Edited by: AANGEL3 at: 8/21/2014 (18:20)
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Remember that it's not person, and she's trying only to make your story better. Also remember that it's her opinion, and if you don't think what she says works for your story, you don't have to listen.

When I first wrote Who Wants to Marry a Cowboy?, my critique group told me 1. my character's motivation wasn't strong enough and 2. There were too many women at the ranch (it was a Bachelor-type competition). I disagreed on both counts. They told me this often when it came up in conversation.

When I signed with my agent, she asked me to cut down on the number of women and ramp up my heroine's motivation. I had to laugh.

Okay, so they were right in that example. But there have been plenty of times where I didn't agree.



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I'm trying. Had a bit of a melt down last night over feedback from one of my beta readers. I think we'er ok know though. I did get more done on chapter 6 last night.

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Aangel, you're cranking it out like hotcakes! Keep going!



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So good news then. That's great. One down one to go.

Krys Scott

According to the BMI chart, i'm much too short! O.O

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I heard back from from of my beta readers. She's reading each chapter via email (she's in Utah), while the other is reading a printed draft copy of each one. The one in Utah didn't see anything in the areas I was concerned about. She just had a few minor observations. Still waiting for the other one to read it. She asked for all 6 chapters in print, so she could read it all in one setting. I did get chapter 6 started last night. emoticon

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Krys is right. Much like you shouldn't judge a book by its cover, you shouldn't judge a chapter by its word count. :)

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