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Tuesday, May 22, 2012

I wrote up a little something about my marathon story. It's supposed to be under 300 words. This is 309. Any suggestions for editing, adding, taking out, changing, etc.
Thanks for any help!

I grew up watching my dad run. I rang cow bells on Summit, held ďGo! Dad! Go!Ē signs for many fathers to smile at, and tried on all his medals in the basement when no one was watching.
I gave running a few halfhearted tries in my teens and twenties. It wasnít until after my second child that running changed my life. I needed something more effective than hours in the gym to get that baby weight off. My husband helped me fall in love with running. He pushed the double jogger AND coached me. We planned runs around naptime and gradually increased distance as we explored our city. That runnerís high finally clicked in. I was hooked.
A year ago we celebrated Fatherís Day with the Lake Como 5K. My siblings, their partners, two joggers, 4 toddlers, and of course my dad. That was my first race. Now I was really hooked.
My dad has run so many marathons that he claims to have lost count. I wonder how thatís possible. He swears that Grandmaís is his favorite. He knew I had the racing bug so he reserved a place in Two Harbors way back in August. Since then Iíve run 4 half marathons, been a good MN girl training outdoors through this mild winter, and learned about fartleks, GUs, compression socks and foam rollers.
On June 16 I will be running my first marathon with my husband and my dad. My sister will run her first half marathon. My sister-in-law would have liked to join us but she is due with baby #3 on race day. This is sure to be a great day for my whole family.
I love racing: the energy rush, the community of people doing something healthy together. All of that is more important than any amount of baby weight that I lost.
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AMBER281 6/2/2012 11:35AM

    Great story.
Thanks for sharing!

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FIT_MAMA_2_FOUR 5/27/2012 9:36AM

    Even though I feel like I know this already, I still so enjoyed reading it. Happy family life. I've said it before...I wanna be to my girls what your dad has been to you. How did this article come about? Have a great Sunday:)
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ONEKIDSMOM 5/26/2012 9:24AM

    Woo-hoo! Won't edit, just read it, and LOVE it! Spark on!

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OJIBWEEQUAY 5/22/2012 10:49PM

    Looks like you got it edited! And I love it!!!!!!!!!! Go Dad and Hubby!!!!!!! emoticon emoticon

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FITFOODIE806 5/22/2012 4:35PM

    THANK YOU! took Trish's suggestions, made some of my own, got it it 267 and sent it in to the media coverage for the race.

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FITFORMYFAMILY 5/22/2012 4:17PM

    This is just a little rewrite of paragraph 2 that I think makes it flow a little better. With Trixie's other suggestions, it comes to 282...

I gave running a few halfhearted tries in my teens and twenties, but it was after the birth of my second child that running changed my life. With hopes of losing baby weight, I decided to explore running instead of spending hours at the gym. My husband - running partner, double jogger pusher, and coach - helped me fall in love with the sport. We planned runs around naptime and gradually increased distance as we explored our city. That runner's high finally clicked in. I was hooked.

It might be helpful to somehow include that spring 2011 was the start of your running. It would show how far you've come so quickly, which says even more for your love of it.

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ROUNDTOWNMOM 5/22/2012 3:23PM

    I like what Trixieruns did to edit this piece. That third paragraph just didn't flow well...........BUT............ I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!! Great job!

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RUNNER4LIFE08 5/22/2012 3:07PM

    Suggestions.... Maybe take out:

"My sister-in-law would have liked to join us but she is due with baby #3 on race day."

Would your SIL be upset if you didn't add this piece?

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LEASIM1231 5/22/2012 3:00PM

    Really well written! It is hard to find words to take out. Perhaps "younger days" instead of "teens and twenties" -1, Maybe take out "He swears that Grandma's is his favorite"-7, "With my husband and my dad" take out 2nd my =-1=-9 :)

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TRIXIERUNS 5/22/2012 2:53PM

    I got it down to 275.

I grew up watching my dad run. I rang cow bells on Summit; held ďGo! Dad! Go!Ē signs for all the fathers to smile at; tried on his medals when no one was watching.
I gave running a few half-hearted tries in my teens and twenties. It wasnít until after my second child that running changed my life. I needed something more effective than hours in the gym to get that baby weight off. My husband helped me fall in love with running. He pushed the double jogger AND coached me. We planned runs around naptime and gradually increased distance as we explored our city. Finally, the runnerís high clicked and I was hooked.
A year ago we, my siblings, their partners, two joggers, 4 toddlers, and of course my dad, celebrated Fatherís Day with the Lake Como 5K.. This was my first race and ow I was really hooked.
My dad has run so many marathons; he claims to have lost count. I wonder how thatís possible. He swears that Grandmaís is his favorite. He knew I had the racing bug so he reserved a place in Two Harbors way back in August. Since then Iíve run 4 half marathons, been a good MN girl training outdoors through this mild winter, and learned about fartleks, GUs, compression socks and foam rollers.
On June 16, I will be running my first marathon with my husband and my dad. My sister will run her first half marathon. I love racing: the energy rush, the community of people doing something healthy together. All of that is more important than any amount of baby weight that I lost.


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A-STRONGER-ME 5/22/2012 2:53PM

    look at P3

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